tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7481184847031158025.post2483156534616577160..comments2022-07-14T05:56:22.512-07:00Comments on Taylor's Blog: The Ups and Downs of Gas Prices: Rough DraftTaylor's Bloghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08078064010983083913noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7481184847031158025.post-51966873198615952722011-05-09T13:12:54.355-07:002011-05-09T13:12:54.355-07:00Taylor,
I appreciate the inquisitive nature of th...Taylor,<br /><br />I appreciate the inquisitive nature of this piece. As a rough draft, I have a few questions re: some of the details you mention...specifically, I was curious as to why, in the 1970's, people suddenly feared oil reserves were going to run dry. How did this idea come about- you mention an embargo, but no real specifics on how/why it happened What impact did it have on oil industry in the U.S.(and here, I'm thinking about the oil crisis of the Carter Administration, as well as in the early 1980s). Also, you make quite the assumptive leap about oil speculators being honest, hard-working people...I'm sure some are, but, like any business, there are those that are actively causing harm to our economy. Perhaps, as Brian suggested, some concrete examples/interviews of these businessmen (and women) to improve your point there.<br />Finally, I would urge that, given the form of the blog, you make a point to signal your transitions with clear paragraph breaks. Without indenting or line spaces, the piece reads as a single, dense paragraph. <br />Best of luck with the revision. Thanks for letting me take a look.Zach Odenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03414414163050335824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7481184847031158025.post-5348336915700064962011-05-08T13:50:50.596-07:002011-05-08T13:50:50.596-07:00Good start. I like how you start with a history of...Good start. I like how you start with a history of America's oil needs and you acknowledging opposing views. However, the reader needs to know who is making the claims. <br /><br />Some suggestions:<br /><br />Make sure to cite all borrowed information, including your images. This must be done. Remember, your essay is in the public domain!<br /><br />Could you explain the green/blue graph in more detail? It is unclear to me what that graph means. <br /><br />You keep referring to "people" throughout the essay, what people? Who specifically? Remember to use level-1 abstractions, proper nouns and examples to add credibility to your argument.Bryan A. Lutzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01126783405508845024noreply@blogger.com